Beaver James:
My thoughts:
This was a story I wrote on my lunch hour almost a year ago. A fellow fanfic writer had started a One Hour Only theme. The idea was to write a short story of a thousand words, give or take, covering a one hour segment in the life of the character.
I thought it would be interesting to see the events unfold strictly from Beaver’s perspective. My first attempt at this story was done in third person but I had been contemplating a rewrite written in first person POV for some time. When I finally got to it I found that it needed more than just changing pronouns. I reworded some passages and added more of Beaver’s thoughts about his comrades. I even gave him a real name. That was fun; as my name for him was partially a play on the show Leave it to Beaver.
As the reader gets to the point where Beaver is affected by the mindbender effect caused by the alien rock, they no longer hear or see SHADO personnel. Just like Beaver they hear and see aliens. I decided to have Beaver freed from the effect of the rock when Foster mortally wounds him. I wanted his last thoughts to redeem him and add what little comfort I could to a very tragic moment. Lake had greeted Beaver earlier in the episode and I felt as if there might be something between them, not romantic but maybe an unseen act of kindness. Maybe he held a door for her one day, or she brought him a coffee to save him a walk to the mess hall. His feeling of remorse for putting Virginia in danger was to let the reader know that Beaver became himself before he died.
I’d like to thank everyone who commented on this, I see some brilliant ideas here and I’d be glad to share to concept if someone wants to have a go at it.
Matt
My thoughts:
This was a story I wrote on my lunch hour almost a year ago. A fellow fanfic writer had started a One Hour Only theme. The idea was to write a short story of a thousand words, give or take, covering a one hour segment in the life of the character.
I thought it would be interesting to see the events unfold strictly from Beaver’s perspective. My first attempt at this story was done in third person but I had been contemplating a rewrite written in first person POV for some time. When I finally got to it I found that it needed more than just changing pronouns. I reworded some passages and added more of Beaver’s thoughts about his comrades. I even gave him a real name. That was fun; as my name for him was partially a play on the show Leave it to Beaver.
As the reader gets to the point where Beaver is affected by the mindbender effect caused by the alien rock, they no longer hear or see SHADO personnel. Just like Beaver they hear and see aliens. I decided to have Beaver freed from the effect of the rock when Foster mortally wounds him. I wanted his last thoughts to redeem him and add what little comfort I could to a very tragic moment. Lake had greeted Beaver earlier in the episode and I felt as if there might be something between them, not romantic but maybe an unseen act of kindness. Maybe he held a door for her one day, or she brought him a coffee to save him a walk to the mess hall. His feeling of remorse for putting Virginia in danger was to let the reader know that Beaver became himself before he died.
I’d like to thank everyone who commented on this, I see some brilliant ideas here and I’d be glad to share to concept if someone wants to have a go at it.
Matt